Sunday, February 18, 2007

The Smile

In a disarray was my mind
Restless my heart chose to be
Then it dawned upon myself
It was your smile that was killing me.

3 comments:

Anonymous said...

:) As always, I really like your infinite capacity to spring surprises!!!
Good beginning, yo! The form is really good and practical - retains the reader, brings that dawning on the reader's face very quickly (!) - but puts pressure on you to weigh each word and choose very carefully - and that's good.

So wishing a smile like that will come your way soon!!!
And then you got a ready-made poem to send - you can act really fast!!

S! said...

Going back to your email, one of my theories has always been that art is created, & we generally have a tendency to over-emphasize the role of 'inspiration' or 'experiencing' the art.

My slightly warped post on the topic was Claritivity. When you get a chance, let me know what you think.

S!

Anonymous said...

What is it? Fever? Madness? Love?